One of my poems!

Disappointment

Everything coming out,
The world is closing in.
She looks at me in disappointment.
But what could I have done
Standing, thinking, breathing,
Closing my eyes to take it
All in at once.
She still looks at me in
Disappointment.
Like I could have done better.
But the question is...
What could I have done better?
What do I have to do to please her?
I receive no answer.
No response at all.
Not even the slightest noise was heard.
She still looks at me in disappointment.

Please give me your feedback!!! :) I would love to hear what you think. And there is more to come!

what is on my mind at the moment...

I am sitting at my computer thinking of what is on my mind. Okay ya i can't really believe i am doing this. It doesn't really make sense. I was thinking that i might put some of my poems up on here and see what people think. I mean if anyone actually sees my blog. Well if you do then i would love for you to comment and tell me what you think of my poems/ songs ( ya i have some songs too that i would love for you guys to give your input to) gracias!!! I will be on later :)